Look! Who’s Talking? Managing Points of View in Your Stories

Who’s talking? How many POV characters can we have? We have the woman on the phone, the older woman and the boy, plus the person on the other end of the phone line. Which one has most to lose? Who do we need to hear from?

Writers make choices all the time. One of the most important choices we make is who we choose to tell our stories. Selecting our ‘Point of View’ characters, or ‘Focalisers’ shapes the impact, focus and tone of our books. 

How do you choose which character will be your protagonist? Who will readers align with most? Whose actions and emotional epiphanies will lead the story and shape the plot? What other characters provide necessary juxtapositions to that viewpoint? What other insights can be gained from lesser characters and their perceptions of the protagonist?

William Faulkner’s As I Lay Dying was one of the first novels I read that demonstrated how effective multiple viewpoints of the same situation can be. In this short novel, Faulkner examines the death of a patriarch and the impact on his family, through showing us all of their perspectives. The same situation through different eyes. Anyone with siblings will understand how we can experience the same event as children, but each have different memories of it. Existence is subjective and by using multiple points of view characters we can express this subjectivity and draw out interesting points of difference. 

Another great novel to study the use of multiple viewpoints is Barbara Kingsolver’s The Poisonwood Bible, which uses the voices of a missionary’s wife and children in Africa, even a very young child. Each of those voices is powerful and intimate and gives us insight, not only into the events of the story, but also into each character, as we see not only how they view themselves but how they are viewed by others and how each is impacted by the situation.

Me and my brother Matty riding a horse 1975

In Thrill Seekers I used three, first person voices. Brian, the eldest brother tasked with protecting his brother and mother after the death of his father; Douggie, the younger brother who develops schizophrenia and Beck, a girl in the neighbourhood entangled in the mess the boys make. The use of first person brings the reader as close as possible to the reader. First person, present tense is the most immediate and intimate of voices. I chose Brian to be the protagonist and to begin and end the story because he had most at stake. He was the one given the ‘quest’ of protecting the family so his struggle to do so shapes the narrative. Douggie’s voice gives the perspective of the son who has lost his battle with grief and his mind in the process. Beck provides a feminine view of the events and the boys themselves.

My nana's sisters are the flower girls here, their mother seated on the far left

IDear Madman I again used three main strands. I like the balance three brings and often warn writers of the dangers of only using two focalisers. This results in a battle for supremacy, whereas three strands weave together easily, like a plait. The murderer Joe’s voice, came to me so strongly I had no choice but to take dictation of his flood of excuses, blame and hopelessness. His voice was so strong it was a fight to contain him and wrest back control of the book. I attempted to balance his first-person rant with a more subdued third person omniscient (this means going into multiple character’s viewpoints within the same section) strand of the family members, with each expressing the impact of this man’s presence and actions throughout. Still the book’s balance wasn’t there until I added the third strand, my own memoir voice, interpreting and reflecting on my research journey and the intergenerational effects of violent crime. 

HOW DO YOU CHOOSE YOUR POV CHARACTERS?

Who has the most to lose?
  1. Choose your protagonist – the character with a quest or question that must be answered. This character usually has the most to lose. Think about this throughout. What is at stake? What is the very worst that could happen to them? Make it worse.
  • Will you have an antagonist? Is there a human adversary to your main character? Getting inside their head will give an interesting depth and perspective. Why do these ‘bad’ guys do the bad things? What motivates them? (Every one of your characters has a goal, desires and dreams, even those without focaliser status)
  • Which other character’s perspective will bring the most nuance and insight to the story events? Find another character who loves, or hates, or is investigating one or both of the other focalisers. What will they bring to the story? 
Mother, daughter, child? What part does each voice play?

HOW MANY VOICES?

From experience I’d recommend three to five focalisers. More than this can become confusing for the reader, unless expertly managed. Beware of the two hander and that battle for supremacy – finding that balance is very tricky.

Cave ceiling without illumination

DIFFERENTIATING THE VOICES

A lot of commercial fiction these days separates different viewpoint third person POV sections in their own chapters. For example a story of three sisters around the death of their mother, which is told in chapters that alternate between the three perspectives. Even though they were brought up in the same family, culture and environment, each of these voices needs to be immediately recognisable. Their way of speaking, thinking and being in the world must show through in their chapters from the first line of each of their sections. A heading with their name at the top of the page isn’t enough.

Get to know your characters through daydreaming about them, collaging their worlds, doing lots of backstory writing about them, getting into their heads. Try my “Getting into Character” exercise for a great way to access their psychology. Differentiate each one with idiosyncratic ways of speaking and behaving. One may bulldoze over everyone else’s attempts to speak. Another may end every sentence with a question mark or start each one with “sorry”. Another may remain mostly silently but have the greatest insight into the hearts of the others and herself.

A change of perspective can bring new light to a situation and illuminate it! Same cave ceiling, different perspective!

Using multiple viewpoint characters is also very useful in shaping a suspenseful plot. One of the best pieces of advice I’ve received in my 24 years plus of writing, is “Don’t take the reader where they want to go.” End a scene on a cliffhanger – never solve a situation within a scene – then take the reader to the next POV character and flesh out their scene leading to another cliffhanger, then switch to the next POV and then finally back to our first character, resolve that dilemma and move onto the choice or cliffhanger and so on. 

In traditional memoir you are confined to the first person past tense voice of “I”, though even then we have “previous you” and “wise you now”. But you can also do as Kris Olsson did in Boy Lost and I did in Dear Madman, recreate scenes and characters from the past to provide other strands and viewpoints.

I hope that has demystified using multiple points of view a little. Any questions just ask!

If you’d like to immerse yourself in your writing and learn more about the craft from me and the wonderful Kerstin Pilz in person, we still have a few rooms left for our September 19 – 24 Byron Bay Writing Retreat. Writers of all levels of experience and genders are welcome. If you have an ABN for your writing, all retreats are tax deductible! YES!

Workshops on retreat are lots of fun!

Bookings are now open for Blissful Bali 2027 and Italy 2027 too (one large single and one shared room – grab a writing friend for the holiday of a lifetime!).

In the meantime, write like the wind – wild and free and don’t let the bastards get you down!

Lots of love,

Edwina 🙂 xx

CRAFTING CHARACTERS THROUGH SETTING DETAILS

Looking for Clues

Writers are natural snoops, observers on the lookout for clues, closely examining the world around them to figure out how people work and uncovering their secrets. We can’t count on people to tell the truth about themselves, but we can discover what they’re leaving out by closely observing their surroundings.

The same goes for our characters. 

We can get our characters talking in dialogue, but they won’t give much away. What others say about them can give us more clues – so many different opinions. But really, all people, and characters, reveal their true selves by what they DO. That’s why charACTers must ACT! They can say one thing and do another, what they do is the truth.

But first, let’s find out as much as we can about our story people by examining their surroundings and possessions.

Specific Telling Details

When visiting someone’s home for the first time, or the thirtieth, we writerly types aren’t just settling into the couch but searching the room for telling details that give us insight into who our friend really is. 

Pictures of family stuck to the fridge? Faded pixie photos of children in school uniforms with outdated hairstyles? Wall calendars stacked on top of each other hanging from the nail on the wall. Fresh flowers from the garden, or dusty plastic bouquets forgotten on top of cabinets. Carpet or polished floors? Kitchen benches scattered with leftovers from preparing the last meal, butter melting in its container; or pristine benches smelling of bleach?

Every clue gives us vital information about our new friend, or how our old friend is coping. Those photos on the fridge are from a decade earlier, the first calendar on that piled upon hook date from the year their marriage fell apart. As you can see, details of a person’s living space provide us with lots of information. Don’t neglect these details in your writing.

Uncover Secrets

What’s your character’s lounge room like? What about the kitchen? Their bedroom? 

And just wait till you look inside their fridge, or even better, the bathroom cabinet. Is it stacked with pregnancy tests or haemorrhoid ointments? Herbal toothpaste and castor oil or expensive, chemical-laden beauty products? And what about music choices? AC/DC or Mozart? Disco or Jazz? Art on the walls? Abstract originals or Kmart prints of tigers? Fluffy toys on a grown man’s bed? Star Wars pillowcases on an older woman’s? A jungle of plants covering the kitchen table? A hallway narrowed to a pathway through mounds of stacked boxes and files?

A person’s character is shaped by their environment – the country we grow up in, the culture and religion we are born into, the weather and geography.  When you are developing your characters, think about where they come from, where they live and those small telling details you’d find in their home, handbag or pockets. We don’t need pages of description, but you can slide in important clues in half a sentence or two. 

“Fran opened the fridge to find all the organic vegetables she’d bought on Monday. They exhausted her.” Or “Bob stuck his hand into his pocket finding only the lucky rock he’d found as a kid and had carried ever since, and a crusty hanky he really needed to wash.”

I’m already thinking about that lucky rock and where Bob found it and why that rock, found on that faraway day, was so important. I know he’s not going to wash the hanky

TRY THIS

What is in your character’s pockets?

What’s in their fridge?

Go snooping in their bathroom, what clues can you find that give you insight into the past that shaped them and the person they’re dreaming of becoming?

We are, all of us, reaching for the future but dwelling on the past. What does your character really want? And what pain from the past is preventing them achieving it? Where do their thoughts get stuck in a loop? What’s their greatest dream?

Uncover your character’s hidden depths

Use your writing supersleuth powers to dig deep into the heart of every character that plays a major role in your story. Some people like to fill in imaginary questionnaires. 

But I don’t do that with new friends, I check out what they’re wearing. I snoop around their homes, grab a drink from their fridge. I clock similarities to myself and those interesting differences. Most of all I search for clues to their past and what’s shaped them.

Go snooping in your character’s lives and freewrite about what you find. Only snippets may find their way into your story, but you may just stumble upon what really makes them tick.

That new friend may have frozen rats in the freezer, photos of two concurrent love interests on the fridge and heavy-duty tranquilizers in the cabinet (and you’d always thought they were just so naturally calm!).

Use all these setting elements to develop your character and make them more than just a stereotype. Create interesting, fully-rounded characters, shaped by their pasts, grasping for a dream, and reflected by their surroundings.

If you’d like to learn more about CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT I’m running a FREE CREATING CHARACTERS WORKSHOP at Elanor Library on the Gold Coast on Saturday February 1, 2025. Did I say FREE? Book in HERE.

And if you’d like to explore the myriad ways you can add depth, meaning, emotional undercurrents and so much more to your writing through setting details, then join me at the Queensland Writers Centre in South Brisbane on Sunday March 9 for a full day masterclass on SETTING – MORE THAN JUST THE SCENERY. Book in HERE

Give some of these exercises a go and discover what really makes your characters tick!

Let me know how you go! Come along to one of the workshops! I’d love to see your smiling face.

Lots of love

Edwina 🙂 xx