WRITING PLACE – SETTING THE SCENE!

What kind of a story could happen in this setting?

The more I write, the more I realise the importance of setting to the whole story. Characters are important, yes. Plot and structure – of course. But getting your setting working and functioning in all its capacities is also vital. 

Why?

  1. Setting the Scene: Grounding your reader:

The number one reason setting matters is that readers need to feel grounded in the world of your story. 

Fantasy writers mostly understand the need to create the world they envision and translate it to the page so the reader can share this world and imagine their characters within it. However, establishing setting isn’t only important for magical realms, fantasy writers just need to spend more time developing the world on the page than the rest of us, as their worlds are unfamiliar.

What clues would you write to set this scene?

Writers of historical fiction also need to spend time giving the reader enough clues so they too can envision this other world, set back in time. These days we don’t have the luxury of page after page to do this like Henry James and other 19th century writers. 

Writers today need to choose the very best, most telling details that will set the scene, and then continue to include setting snippets throughout the action, seeding in clues, rather than giving us all the details one big chunk.

Even if you’re writing a story set this year, you always need to establish the setting where the action is taking place – at the start of your story and at the opening of each scene. 

What story lurks in this setting? How would you paint a picture of it with words?

In this era of visual storytelling through film, many new writers assume that, as in the movies, readers can see where the action is happening without being told. But they can’t. 

Unlike in film, we have no visual clues other than those the writer provides. So drip feed in those unexpected, telling, specific sensory details. Without them the reader can’t see where your stunning dialogue is taking place and quickly loses interest because envisioning the conversation is too difficult without enough information. 

Choose the right clues so the reader can easily envisage where the action is taking place. You need to do this with every scene. See also GROUNDING THE READER for more information on how to do this and why it’s important.

2. The Objective Correlative

T. S. Eliot talks about the difficulty of bringing deep emotions to the page and the need to use elements within that environment to illustrate the emotional undercurrents being experienced by the characters. He calls this – the objective correlative, using objects in the setting as symbols of the emotional undercurrent, to illustrate what remains unspoken. The clock that stopped working when the old man died. The tree the couple planted when they were first married, withering and dying as their marriage crumbles. The new seed breaking through the drought cracked earth after the first rain.

Shakespeare knew about the power of setting. He even called one play, The Tempest! The storm in the natural world reflecting the storm in the human story. In King Lear the climactic scene plays out with the background of another violent storm. So don’t underestimate the power of the weather.

Set your story of a country family hitting hard times during a drought, with animals dying, creeks drying up, earth cracking. Set your light-hearted rom com among rolling hills and babbling brooks. And of course, your horror story just won’t work if you set it on a sunny day at the beach – or – think again – Jaws! Maybe it can?  A great juxtaposition – a sunny summer holiday and a killer shark.

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Use the setting to show us what the emotional undercurrent is, even if the surface dialogue is all playing nice. 

In The Spare Room Helen Garner’s protagonist, Helen, is pruning roses while a friend tells her she thinks she’s doing too much for her dying friend, and with every clip, clip, clip of the secateurs we know she’s getting angrier and angrier.

How can you use setting details to show what’s really going on emotionally? You can choose one element of the setting to act as a symbol or use different elements of the setting throughout to add that extra layer of meaning and emotional depth. See also Setting – More than Just the Scenery. And for using setting in dialogue see HERE and HERE

3. Setting as a character

Sometimes place becomes more than just the stage where the action is set, and becomes a character in its own right with its own arc and changes. If the setting is forcing characters to take action, it is a character itself. Think of 1984 by George Orwell and that dark grimy bureaucratic world of Big Brother, the situation, society and politics, shape the action of the story.

In my own book Thrill Seekers, the dirty mangrove creek I grew up on and the Brisbane River/Meanjin, which it feeds into, help shape the narrative.

Here’s an example from early in the story, before the shit hits the fan. 

“The creek flooded over the mud and lapped at the mangroves, washing away the oil slicks and covering the black. The current sure was strong. Soon I couldn’t see any mud at all, just water racing past like it was going somewhere and needed to get there in a hurry. Like it wanted to take us all on that raft and make us ride with it, faster and faster, wherever it wanted to take us.”

From the middle:

“Empty goon bladders and rumpled cigarette packets slosh around my feet as the dinghy speeds down the middle of the river towards home. The water looks like milk with the full moon shining on it, almost beautiful when you can’t see the dirt.”

And from the ending:

“I stand like a crusty old seadog at the wheel of my ship, feet wide apart to keep my balance, my hands steady. Looking down the river I steer a straight course, right down the middle. Feeling ten feet tall with a chest as wide and strong as a bear’s, I roll with the movement of the boat. Salty water sprays my face, and my cheeks stretch into a mighty grin.”

The Bremer River/Urarra that runs through Ipswich my new hometown.

These are only a few of the descriptions of the river and creeks throughout the story, but you can see through these short examples how they are used to illustrate not only the emotional undercurrents of the character, but also show development and change in the river itself. You can buy Thrill Seekers HERE

At the beginning of Gone with the Wind by Margaret Mitchell, Scarlet O’Hara’s family property, Tara, is lush and richly opulent (on the back of the slave trade sadly) then at the middle of the story, Tara is a burnt out ruin. By the end Tara is returned to a semblance of its former glory, but forever changed.

Dawn Rote Island, Indonesia – a new story begins?

Can you think of ways to make your setting more of a character? 

How does your setting change and grow? 

Do you have multiple settings? What does each of these bring to the story? 

How can you make better use of your settings to ground your reader, illustrate emotional undercurrents or have their own arc?

I’d love to hear your ideas! Let me know what you think in the comments.

Hope this has been useful.

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Lots of love

Edwina xx

GIVING AND RECEIVING FEEDBACK – Writers Helping Each Other

Retreaters writing and giving and receiving feedback at our April Retreat.

When we are working on a story we can get lost in the forest of words and can’t see a way through. Other writers can help. And we can help them find a way out of their own dark woods. 

One thing I know for sure is that I’ve learnt the most about writing from giving feedback on other writer’s stories. It’s so much easier to see where things are getting off track in someone else’s writing, than in your own. 

Why?

In our own stories we live in that world we’ve created. We fill in all the missing gaps and plot holes that may be on the page with the thousands of extra unwritten pages in our heads. We know why that character is acting so strangely (it was their terrible battle for attention with their sister in childhood) but we can’t see that the reason hasn’t made it to the writing.  

We sort of know when there’s a plot hole but think perhaps no one else will notice. Sorry to say, they do!

The same thing happens with proofreading, our eyes no longer see the words on the page, only the words we expect to be there. We need other eyes. Eyes that haven’t been living the story as we wrote it. Eyes that see only what’s made it to the page and what’s missing, or what can go. Yes, those bits, the darlings that have to go. All those extra trees, blocking our view of the path!

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Don’t struggle on alone with your project, get some feedback from other writers who are kind and understand that writing a book is no easy task. Writers need each other. Yes, we mostly like to write alone, though all those people who produce great work at Writing Fridays in QLD and in other writing groups like company, but ALL writers need other writers to help them see their work more clearly and bring it to publication standard.

If you are searching for Beta Readers who are writers, then join or start a small writers’ group where you can exchange work and give constructive advice on how to fix any flaws. 

I like to keep my writing groups small, four or five or even less will do. I’ve met my writing group buddies through attending retreats and workshops, writers’ festivals and even on buses. 

Writing group meetings can be lots of fun!

Team up with a few like-minded people on the same writing path as they understand the Herculean task of writing a book and will be able to give you helpful feedback, not just the “jolly goods” from family.

Here are some simple tips to help you give and receive feedback on your writing.

HOW TO GIVE FEEDBACK 

  • First do no harm. Remember that writers are sensitive folk. Be gentle in your feedback but also helpful. 
  • The aim is to make the piece of work the best it can be, while keeping the writer’s heart and soul intact.
  • When giving feedback keep the work as the subject. EG: This chapter isn’t working as well as others or This sentence is hard to understand. Avoid making anything personal by not using “you”. Eg: “You write like you don’t know that character at all”. Instead, “That character isn’t as fully developed as the others”.
  • Give your emotional response as you read through. Are you feeling happy for the character here? Or afraid? 
  • Notice what’s working well, and what areas aren’t. 
  • Praise what is working – here you can be personal – You did a great job with that scene! –  and gently point out areas that need more work. 
  • Give tips on how to remedy the problem.

WHAT YOU’RE LOOKING FOR

STRUCTURAL STUFF

  • Is there a hook? What’s grabbing the reader’s interest and keeping them reading?
  • What’s the central quest or question? – is there a through line that carries the piece?
  • What’s at stake? Is enough at stake?
  • Point of View – is the right person telling the story. If multiple POV characters, are the right ones telling the right bits. Is the writer head hopping rather than staying in the POV character’s voice?
  • Is it starting at the right place? Where else could it start? Start with a hook!
  • Does it end in the right place? Each chapter, each scene.
  • Is anything slowing the story down? Is it compelling or are there a lot of scenes that aren’t really going anywhere or moving the story forward?
  • Characters: Are they engaging? Do you empathise with them, or at least find them amusing if they’re not meant to be likeable? Is the main character making decisions and taking action, changing and growing? 
  • Are there SCENES? Or is the writer telling and not showing?
  • Is it making sense?
  • Setting. Can you clearly envision where action or dialogue is taking place?
  • Is dialogue used? Is it working well? How can it be improved?

LINE EDITING

  • Trim down unnecessary adjectives and adverbs
  • Remove all extra padding from sentences. Each sentence should be easy to understand and get the intended meaning across clearly, without extra words getting in the way.

For more on line-editing see SELF EDITING 101.

The main thing to remember when giving feedback is that writers are sensitive souls, their writing is precious to them and they’ve worked hard on what you’re reading. Be gentle and encouraging, but also help them to improve their work with specific, story related and framed advice.

Keep your advice constructive. Not, “You suck at dialogue” but “The dialogue in this section doesn’t sound natural yet”.

Always find at least three good things in every piece to balance out the criticisms. Start and end with the positives – even if you have to repeat them. 

Photo by Andrea Piacquadio on Pexels.com This may be how you feel on the inside, but try to look and act more like the image below.
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HOW TO RECEIVE FEEDBACK

  • First, get your story into the best possible shape you can and present it professionally. Then put on your big girl pants and send it out, knowing that this process will improve your story and help you to develop as a writer. I like to do direct swaps so both parties are going to be receiving critiques simultaneously – fair is fair.
  • Ask specific questions about the advice you’re seeking – eg: Is this character working? or Tell me where it gets boring. Or Am I starting in the right place? Am I head jumping? Am I writing in scenes?
  • When you get the feedback. Stay quiet. Just let the other person give their opinion and resist the urge to jump in straight away in defence of your work. Just listen to the critique all the way through. Say thank you.
  • Remember people are taking the time to read your work and help you improve it. They are trying to be useful and to help you make your piece the best it can be.
  • Don’t take critiques personally. Don’t react immediately and leap into a new draft. 
  • Let the feedback settle for a few days at least. 

Most of all TRUST YOUR GUT. You’ll know what criticism feels right. “Oh yeah, I thought that character was kind of blah”, or “I knew I should’ve started there! YES!”.

You are the writer, and YOU HAVE TOTAL CONTROL OVER YOUR WORK. You make the ultimate decision over what feedback to accept and what to let go. Take your time and be kind to yourself.

BOTH PARTIES

  • Be respectful and kind at all times.
  • Have fun and enjoy helping each other.
Photo by Zen Chung on Pexels.com Writing buddies become great friends.

Sharing our writing in this most intimate way, assisting our writing friends to polish their work to high standard and receiving their comments on ours with grace, is a great joy. Who else gets to sit around together talking about characters as if they’re real and then decide what we’ll do to them next?

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Me and the lovely Laurie checking out HOI AN old town at the Vietnam retreat earlier this year,

Do you have a writing group? A writing buddy? What works best for you and your stories?

Let me know. I hope these tips have been useful.

Have a wonderful writing day!

Lots of love

Edwina xx